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In your opinion in what ways does agriculture contribute to economic grows?

#agriculture
In the modern era, most
of
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the
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countries develop their economies with different sectors like industry, machinery, transportation, software
developing
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 etc. Some
of
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the
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people think
about
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that agriculture is
obselete
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obsolete
. In my
opinion
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 it is not correct. I will discuss
about
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the reasons why
agricultural
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 sector is still important and how
contribute
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 to
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 treasure.
Firstly
, one of the traditional
way
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 to
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a growth
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growth
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economy
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 is
producing
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 raw materials and crops. Cultivation can provide food diversity and wealth. With advanced technology like
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 tubes or pump sets,
crops
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 qualities will be increased.
In addition
 fertilizers and pesticides are assisting the increased number of products.
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,
huge
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amount
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 of food can help
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the country
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country
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countries
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 to become self-sufficient and start exporting
their
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 surplus.
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 from soil to plate, all
process
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processes
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 need different
sectors
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sectors'
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involvement
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such
 as
logistical
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 sector, transportation, marketing, storage etc.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
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