Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negative development?
With the advancements in
the
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technology
, many people
have changed their methods of interacting with other individuals. This
essay is to discuss how technology
has affected on
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people
's relationships
and its negative impacts.
Innovations and improvements in the
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technology
affected people
's relationships
in both positive and negative ways, especially in terms of communication. As a negative impact, many individuals do not meet others in person nowadays, because of the availability of different tools and applications. For an instance, people
meet via social media applications. On the other hand
, these applications positively support to communicate
with Change the verb form
communicating
people
who are in
longer distances. Change preposition
on
For example
, it is much easier and faster to communicate with a person from anywhere in the world.
However
, many negative results have developed because of the improvements in technology
. One of those negative impact
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impacts
,
scams and threats Remove the comma
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in
the internet. Change preposition
on
In other words
, there are many folks who build relationships
with others in order to scam or threat
them. Replace the word
threaten
For example
, recently FBI did a
research about scammers and found out that the number of crimes related to scamming increased in the Remove the article
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last
decade due to
social media. Some of those incidents had
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resulted
serious Add the preposition
inresulted
fromresulted
damages
to several Fix the agreement mistake
damage
people
. Also
, another negative development is that
privacy and trust issues. In the past, Correct word choice
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people
used to talk to each other in person which build their trust and privacy. But nowadays, many folks especially adolescents tend to build relationships
with people
that they have never seen. As a result
, they get cheated and abandoned causing various problems. For example
, a teenage girl in India suicided
after finding out that her boyfriend was cheating on her with a fake profile.
Replace the word
suicide
To conclude
, technology
has Correct article usage
a negatively
negatively
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negative
impact
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impacted
on
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people
's relationships
nowadays significantly and it is a controversial topic to discuss.Submitted by dmdeemanthakasun on
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