The three pie charts show the changes in annual spending by a particular school in 1981, 1991, and 2001.
A glance at the three pie charts provided
reveal
some changes in annual Change the verb form
reveals
expendituring
in one of the schools in Correct your spelling
expenditure
expenditures
UK
in three decades.As it is clear,spending Correct article usage
the UK
money
in all sectors has fluctuated during these years.
The main sources of Use synonyms
money
,first of all,in the school Use synonyms
has
dedicated to Correct subject-verb agreement
have
teachers
salaries with 40%,50%and 45% in1981,1991 and 2001 respectively.the second biggest proportion of Change noun form
teachers'
teacher's
money
spend Use synonyms
for
other Change preposition
on
workers
salaries,during Change noun form
workers'
worker's
this
period,Linking Words
has
slightly decreased between 15% and 28 %.
Unnecessary verb
apply
According to
the pie charts,Linking Words
school
has allocated Add an article
the school
money
for other parts Use synonyms
ot
its school Correct your spelling
of
such
as preparing Linking Words
furnitures
and other Correct your spelling
furniture
equipments
,at least in 1991 with 5% and Change the wording
equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
maximum
Correct article usage
a maximum
with
23% in 2001.Meanwhile during Change preposition
of
Linking Words
this
years spending Correct determiner usage
these
money
Use synonyms
for
some resources,Change preposition
on
for
Linking Words
instance
books,was Add a comma
,instance
Linking Words
further
point.that it had Correct article usage
a further
changes
,somewhere between 9% and 20 Correct your spelling
changed
percent
.It is obvious,the smallest part of annual spending Change the spelling
per cent
money
was related to Use synonyms
insurance
sector and it Add an article
the insurance
has
rose from 2% in 1981 to 8 % in 2001.Unnecessary verb
apply
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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