Some people think that people can use animals for the benefit of humans. Others believe that this practice is wrong. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays people like pets. some people think that
animals
are useful for humans and others
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the statement. In my opinion,
i
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belive
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believe
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that,
animals
are very helpful in our
day to day
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life.
firstly
, people are using
animals
as a source of income.
For instance
,
animals
such
as ox,
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and buffellow
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buffellow
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but fellow
those
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are
aid
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to
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farmers in farming manually. and
moreover
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the cow which gives milk. there are many factories established in some countries which
producing
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milk from
cow
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cows
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and
buffellow
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buffalo
. They transfer their products to
another countries
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another country
other countries
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and it helps
economic
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growth of the country.
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, micro
organisams
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organisms
and earthworms
used
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as compost which
help
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to grow the plant faster
rathar
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rather
than using pesticides. those
are
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damage our health. when comes to health benefits ,
animals
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animal
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meat
such
as goat meat and chicken ,egg,
fish
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and fish
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those
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are contain
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rich
vitamins
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and minerals,
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protiens
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proteins
.
this
protien
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protein
having food helps to stay away from many diseases.
for example
, eating fish can cure
the
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many heart
realated
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related
diseases. Many researchers suggest that
,
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cow milk
have
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vitamin A which
help
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in improving
the
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human
eye sight
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,
muscle
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and muscle
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and bone development. In conclusion,
animals
have many advantages to
humanbeings
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human beings
which helps as
give
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money and food, health purpose, and reduce diseases ,
purpose
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the purpose
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of travelling. there are many
organnizations
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organisations
to protect
the
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animals
. It is our responsibility to protect them. they are very important to
the
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nature.
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