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The grow of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is common knowledge that at these times,
majority
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the majority
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 of
people
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 prefer online shopping,
therefore
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 online
shoping
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shopping
 is growing and some
people
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 believe that it will lead to
closing
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the closing
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all
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of all
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shops
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 in towns and cities, in
this
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 essay I will inform my point of view, and I will tell what I think so.
People
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 suppose that the most important thing in our lives is time, and
people
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 do everything that they
able
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 to do, to save more time.
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 the reason why
people
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 prefer online shopping, online shopping
give
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gives
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people
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the oppurtunity
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oppurtunity
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opportunity
 to save time,
additionaly
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additionally
 it is indeed easy to purchase something on the internet
,
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apply
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than
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then
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 go and buy it from
shops
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.
Due to
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 increasing online
shopping
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,shopping
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 there are many
people
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 who reckon that because of online
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shopping
shoppings
shopings
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,shopings
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 all
shops
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 will be closed.
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However
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 I do not think so.
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, even though online shopping is increasing, and the number of
people
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 who buy something online is more than it used to be, as far as I am able to judge it can not result in
closing
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the closing
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shops
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of shops
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. There are many
people
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 who loathe online shopping,
in
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for
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 instance me. I have no clue why but I loathe online shopping,
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moreover
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,moreover
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 I really adore buying
somethin
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something
 in
shops
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,
altough
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although
 it
is seems
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seems
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bizare
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bizarre
,
but
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apply
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it makes me feel delighted.
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 I disagree that because of online shopping
shops
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 will be closed. In conclusion,
although
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 online shopping is a time-saving way, from my point of view it is unable
lead
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to lead
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 to all
shops
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 in town and cities closing.
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