The grow of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

It is common knowledge that at these times,

majority

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the majority

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people

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prefer online shopping,

therefore

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online

shoping

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shopping

is growing and some

people

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believe that it will lead to

closing

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the closing

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all

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of all

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shops

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in towns and cities, in

this

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essay I will inform my point of view, and I will tell what I think so.

People

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suppose that the most important thing in our lives is time, and

people

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do everything that they

able

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to do, to save more time.

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the reason why

people

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prefer online shopping, online shopping

give

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people

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the oppurtunity

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oppurtunity

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opportunity

to save time,

additionaly

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additionally

it is indeed easy to purchase something on the internet

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apply

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than

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then

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go and buy it from

shops

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Due to

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increasing online

shopping

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there are many

people

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who reckon that because of online

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shopping

shoppings

shopings

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,shopings

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all

shops

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will be closed.

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However

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I do not think so.

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, even though online shopping is increasing, and the number of

people

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who buy something online is more than it used to be, as far as I am able to judge it can not result in

closing

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the closing

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shops

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of shops

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. There are many

people

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who loathe online shopping,

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for

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instance me. I have no clue why but I loathe online shopping,

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moreover

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I really adore buying

somethin

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something

shops

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altough

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although

is seems

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seems

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bizare

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bizarre

but

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apply

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it makes me feel delighted.

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I disagree that because of online shopping

shops

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will be closed. In conclusion,

although

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online shopping is a time-saving way, from my point of view it is unable

lead

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to lead

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to all

shops

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in town and cities closing.

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Feb 27, 2023

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