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The maps below show the changes experienced by the town of Lakeside at the beginning of the 21st Century.

The maps below show the changes experienced by the town of Lakeside at the beginning of the 21st Century.
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The maps illustrate how the town of Lakeside changed in the early years of the 21st century
Overall
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,
this
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 town underwent some significant
transforms
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transformations
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due to
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 the redevelopment and the addition of
infrastructures
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infrastructure
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. On the left-hand side of the river, the residential
area
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 and the arts centre nearby were destroyed and replaced by the shopping centre and the new multi-screen cinema respectively.
In addition
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, a small car park was erected on the original site of the Derelict warehouses and the old town next to
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this
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these
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 warehouses was
also
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 knocked down to make room for
triangular
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the triangular
a triangular
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area
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areas
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 of the offices and a new university. Meanwhile, the schools and the residential
area
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 in the northwest corner stayed unchanged.
In
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On
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 the opposite side, about half of the woodland
area
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 was cut down and
residential
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the residential
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area
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in
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on
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 the north of Lakeside was
also
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 demolished to make way for the huge extension of
industrial
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an industrial
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 complex. At the same period, the lake at the beginning of the river was
also
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 narrowed into
the
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a
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 small pond.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
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