In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?
Today, it can be observed that an increase in obese
people
in the past and they are not keeping fit. In this
essay, I will be discussing causes such
as spending sedentary life and fast foods
. It can be resolved by reducing the usage of those devices and eating healthy foods
.
To begin
with, in today's fast-paced orld, we are encountering a sedentary lifestyle. It can be experienced either at home or workplace due to
technological advancements.In fact, gizmos make our lives comfortable by doing our day-to-day work immediately. Therefore
people
do not attempt to do their work by themselves rather than in past instead
they switch to techy devices. For example
, around three decades ago, household activitieslike washing and cleaning were done by themselves.But, today, those activities are done by electronic improvements such
as washing machines and vacuum cleaners thanks technological advancements and the only thing to do is just switch them on or give them a verbal command.
Additionally
, most people
in the world consume a lot of packaged and fast foods
causing weight and loss health
conditions. This
can be identified as a massive problem among youngsters.In fact , adolescents are get involved in junk foods
when they are schooling and most the teens are experiencing obesity and are not physically healthy. For instance
, According to
the records of physicians around the world, 34% of school children aged between 14-18 , are overweight and 10% of them have diabetes or heart diseases.
To address the aforementioned issues, people
have to switch from sedentary lives to healthy lifestyles.To do that, people
should away from overreliance on technological devices and get involved in regular exercises. Furthermore
, they have to complete their household activities by themselves as far as they can and they are able to participate in walking or running to improve their cardiovascular health
and overall
health
conditions.Moreover
, schoolchildren always should be guided to have a balanced diet with more nutrition and they should be advised to escape from unhealthy foods
.In fact, the media have a massive duty to mitigate such
diseases among the younger generation by health
related programs.
In conclusion, If people
are facing obesity and a lack of physical health
conditions due to
a sedentary lifestyle and fast foods
those consequences can be mitigated by keeping them away as far as they can and doing their household activities by themselves and increasing physical exercises and adding more nutrients for children's portions.Submitted by Praslah on
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