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Noawdays online shopping becomes more popular than in-store shopping. Is it a positive or a negative development?

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In
this
 contemporary epoch,there is a heated argument over the view that in these present-day,day electronic Purchases become more famous rather than offline shopping.In
this
 ,essay some population believe
this
 is a positive achievement.
However
,others think
this
 is a negative development for society.
this
 essay will concur with the latter phenomenon.
While
 both views will be discussed in the upcoming paragraph. To commence with
this
 statement,In
this
 developed ,country individuals become very advanced in their lifestyle.,
Additionally
 online shopping gives a lot of benefits to the community
such
 as they can get a better discount on purchases of clothes or any electronic items like mobile phones,washing machines etc.Adding more to it society do not have to go anywhere for shopping they can use shopping apps and order online
as well as
 sometimes masses will get free home delivery.,
Initially
while
 online shopping individual can earn a lot of money online to refer apps to their friend. On the other ,hand there are
also
 a lot of drawbacks to electronic shopping as
while
 online purchases crowd cannot check the material of the product.
Moreover
,
while
 store shopping they can ask the shopkeeper to give less how much they want.,
Besides
 that nation can get instant discounts
while
 store shopping.
To conclude
,In my ,opinion store shopping is better as compared to online shopping because if they purchase any shirt from teleshopping and after , the shirt becomes defective so, cannot exchange anymore.
However
,by ,chance if they can exchange they have to wait so many days.
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