Some people think that spending a lot on holding wedding parties, birthday parties and other celebrations is just a waste of money. Others, however, think that these are necessary for individuals and the society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Someone

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believes that celebrations like

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wedding celebration, birthday event and others use a

lot

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budget

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to pay for them. On another hand,

someone

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believes

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it very common in communities. In my opinion, I think positively in two ways.

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essay discusses both two points of view. To being with,

someone

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believes that celebrations are not important there are only believe that some events pay a

lot

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of bill like wedding dinner, birthday events and others.

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as, some people in America and in Europe people do not serious about wedding

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more than in Asian countries because of their culture. Sometimes is not about places or culture but it is about personal life and there are communities.

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, technology can change

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everywhere. And there to think saving money to buy a house or get money for their future is better to pay a

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of payment for events. From another point of view, in the modern ,world

someone

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always shows their life story and there think the celebration is common to their status.Asian countries like Thailand and china think that wedding parties are very important and mean respect for each other in their family ,

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, mom and dad or relative. Some families in Asia prefer to have

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big

party

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to show everyone is mean successful in their family.

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,I think celebrations

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very important but we do not spend a

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of money.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.5

Complete response

5.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

242 words

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