Some people think the government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent elsewhere. To what extent do you agree with this view?

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Most
of
Change preposition
apply
show examples
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
people
Use synonyms
think the
government
Use synonyms
is spending
money
Use synonyms
on
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
crafts but some
people
Use synonyms
argue that
this
Linking Words
money
Use synonyms
should be better
to spend
Change the verb form
spent
show examples
on
other
Change the wording
another development sector
other development sectors
show examples
development
Use synonyms
sector. I will examine
this
Linking Words
essay that
this
Linking Words
money
Use synonyms
should be used
to
Change preposition
apply
show examples
elsewhere
Linking Words
.
Art
Use synonyms
and craft is a creative sector. It
is play
Change the verb form
plays
show examples
a vital role
for
Change preposition
in
show examples
Use synonyms
people
Change noun form
people's
show examples
mental
development
Use synonyms
because it is one
of
Change preposition
apply
show examples
enjoyable leisure activity.
People
Use synonyms
give their mind and eyes by seeing
art
Use synonyms
exhibition which keeps our mind calm and active.
For instance
Linking Words
, many artists held craft and fashion
exhibition
Fix the agreement mistake
exhibitions
show examples
every year in schools ,colleges and other places.
Besides
Linking Words
, enhance the beauty of
a
Correct article usage
the
show examples
mind and can gain various types of idea about fashion and
art
Use synonyms
.
In addition
Linking Words
to
this
Linking Words
, artists need
Use synonyms
fund
Fix the agreement mistake
funds
show examples
to arrange
art
Use synonyms
programs.
However
Linking Words
, for developing our country
government
Use synonyms
have to invest
money
Use synonyms
on
Change preposition
in
show examples
roads
Fix the agreement mistake
road
show examples
and bridges construction, stipend , educational core , health sector , poor
fund
Use synonyms
and so on.
Government
Use synonyms
should build lots of
school
Fix the agreement mistake
schools
show examples
and colleges which is
main
Change the article
the main
show examples
side for
children
Change noun form
children's
show examples
brain
development
Use synonyms
because they are
Add an article
the weapon
a weapon
show examples
weapon
Fix the agreement mistake
weapons
show examples
of our country's future establishment.
Moreover
Linking Words
,
Use synonyms
government
Add an article
the government
show examples
should focus on poor
fund
Use synonyms
and
their
Correct pronoun usage
apply
show examples
health insurance. So my opinion is that
government
Use synonyms
have to invest their
money
Use synonyms
in
Linking Words
this
Correct determiner usage
these
show examples
sectors.
Besides
Linking Words
art
Use synonyms
can be
student's
Correct article usage
a student's
show examples
quality activity. In conclusion,
Use synonyms
government
Add an article
the government
show examples
should not spend monetary
Use synonyms
fund
Fix the agreement mistake
funds
show examples
on
arts
Correct article usage
the arts
show examples
. They have to concentrate on
Use synonyms
development
Add an article
the development
show examples
side for
country's
Correct article usage
the country's
show examples
goodwill.
Submitted by opshorajhumpa2001 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • enriching society
  • promoting cultural understanding
  • development of talent
  • creative industries
  • economic benefits
  • generate revenue
  • cultural heritage
  • identity
  • prioritize spending
  • needs of the majority
What to do next:
Look at other essays: