Some people believe that acupuncture works .to what extent do you agree or disagree?

The surgical team are using a 2000 method of controlling
pain_acupuncture
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painacupuncture
. Today,more and more of us are putting our faith
alternative
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medicine.
This
ancient Chinese treatment is now one of the most popular of all alternative therapies. Millions of people are convinced that
acupuncture
works where conventional medicines fail. By
acupuncture
,the energy fills the whole
body
,so it is an effective painkiller. The doctor begins to visit the young
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woman
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feeling her pulse and looking
to
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her tongue. Basically, the glassballs
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shown can help the blood circles
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faster or help the blood
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through your
body
. She said
,
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each specific point is supposed to
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different
part
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of the
body
. After the process,she felt spaced and everything thing was feeling really tingly. Recording to one of the
patien's
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patients
patient's
sayying
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saying
,he had
the
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virus attack and half of his face was
perelized
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paralyzed
,
then
after 5 treatments of
acupuncture
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he got fine . Michelle Kimmons was a smoker
that
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because of health reasons
such
as heart attacks or strokes she wanted to stop it,so she
tryed
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tried
acupuncture
too. If they work
in
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, she should feel sick when she smokes.
Finally
,it works. Meanwhile,the bill is
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third of the cost of
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medicine.It
also
uses
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in open-heart surgery to
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released
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pain.
Instead
of
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treatments of just thinking to fix the part of our
body
,
acupuncture
both fix and rebalance the whole
body
. Maybe ,it could have been some other parts of the treatment except
acupuncture
such
as having that kind of attention or
lieing
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lying
down to relax properly,
while
at least it works for osteoarthritis. Sufferers
where
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devided
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divided
into 3 groups :1_true
acupuncture
2_sham
acupuncture
3_education control group By experiments the
noroscientists
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neuroscientists
discovered that when the needle impressed the brain in taking energies,the area of the brain affected by the deep needling was often called the
limvic
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limbic
systems
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. The discovery
shown
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that parts of the pain deactivate by deep needling
in contrast
to superficial
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.
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