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The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The map
illustrate
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, the development between 1995 and
present
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the present
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 of the village Ryemouth.
Overall
, it is clear from the map that, the major portion of
north east
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northeast
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, Convert farmland
to
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golf
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a golf
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center
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centre
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 and
also
,
fish
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the fish
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 market in the
south west
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south-west
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 were dedicated to
residential
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the residential
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 purpose.
To begin
 with, comparing to 1995 and
present
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the present
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, there is not much change in
north west
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north-west
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 side.
Still
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 it is used as
residential
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a residential
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 area with
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an additional
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additional
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of
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apply
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new
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a new
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 house and are separated
with
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from
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main
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the main
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 roads. The main change
happend
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happened
happens
happen
in
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on
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 the
north east
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northeast
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 side. Farmland and forest park areas
used
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are used
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 for special sports
centers
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centres
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such
 as golf and tennis.
In addition
 to
this
, a car parking area is added to the hotel. The hotels
has
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 no change till now. The shops
replaced
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were replaced
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 by
restaurents
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restaurants
in
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on
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 the
south west
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southwest
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 side.
Fish
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The fish
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 market presented in 1995, changed into apartments and the cafe still remains. In the current Map is no fishing port.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • transformation
  • key features
  • contrasting
  • developments
  • alterations
  • enhancements
  • infrastructure
  • recreational facilities
  • emerging
  • adaptation
  • population growth
  • connectivity
  • accessibility
  • preserve
  • aesthetics
  • analytically
  • livability
  • notable facilities
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