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Many men and women are making the decision to have children later in life. Why is this trend occurring? What are the impacts of this development on both family and society? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

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Couples
 now don'
t
 want to take
children
initially
.
This
 is happen because they want to focus on their own career first and try to enjoy married
life
.Though, they have to face some problems. One of the major reasons why
couples
 want to take kids later in
life
 is that settle down
their
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in their
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 own
life
.
In other words
, when they have no
children
 there is no liability.
That is
 why
,
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 they have more time to pay attention to their personal
life
.
For example
, one of my
cousin
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cousins
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 marry and take
children
 early but he can'
t
 able to reach his goal.Because he has to look after his
children
 which barely gives him time to do something in his
life
.Another reason might be enjoyment.
Couples
 don'
t
 get out late at night with friends because they have
children
 in the house.They can'
t
 able to go for long trips or visit places.
Couples
 who take
children
 later in
life
 can'
t
 able to cope with whom have
children
.Parents love to spend spare time with their
children
 rather than single
couples
.They
also
 face family problems like parents thinking that they do have not
a
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good bonding or health issue.
For example
, in ,Bangladesh most of the old people are not educated and that's a real matter for
couples
 who want to have infants later in
life
.Old peoples think she has
a
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health trouble that's why they have no
children
 and often harass her. In conclusion, having infants later in
life
 gives opportunity to
couples
 to focus on their careers and enjoy themselves.Though , family and society think negatively about them and interact in communication.
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