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These days, cell (mobile) phones and the internet are very important to the ways in which people relate to one another socially. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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There is no doubt that
phones
 and the
internet
 are considered the most basic communication methods and it is impossible to imagine our world without them. Almost everyone has
phones
 and got access to the
internet
.
however
, there are advantages and disadvantages. In
this
 essay I am going to talk about them and why is it important. ,
First
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 the
internet
 can help us in many ways
such
 as by making communication easier you can talk to your friend even if he was in another country. ,
Nevertheless
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 we have e-supermarket making
people
's life much easier than going outside. It should be noted that modern technology helped students to study because we had the covid-19 and
people
 couldn't go to school. As long as
people
 continue to develop the
internet
 we would have a great future. On the other ,hand there are disadvantages to the
internet
 and
phones
 the main problem is
people
 focus on the
internet
 rather than staying with their family or playing outside.
Although
phones
 can help us they can damage society
people
 by making them introverts and have more problems.
however
,
people
 are obsessed with buying new
phones
 and spend a lot of money on them because of the look of the phone. The
internet
 created problems none can fix and increased
the
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obesity and laziness and
people
 can order things
instead
 of going outside and buying them. In conclusion,
although
 there are some disadvantages of not talking with
people
 face-to-face and
therefore
 losing psychological contact, using the World Wide Web and mobile
phones
 have many benefits and
remain
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an important way in social relations.
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