Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?
Nowadays,
children
and teenagers devote hours to using their phones each day. This
, in my opinion, results from social media’s exceptional ability to keep users’ attention. It should be viewed as a negative development because it can make children
’s mental health receive bad influences.
In this
internet era, social media are extremely good at providing people with content
that holds their attention. They track user behaviours like search history and video types watched most, and analyze these data by the methods of machine learning so that they can produce more personalized content
for users, which can make users stick with the smartphones. Since children
tend to lack self-control, they could spend all their time
on “interesting” content
and consequently
waste most of their precious time
that should be used to pursue their dreams.
Unfortunately, hours of phone time
every day can affect harmfully children
’s mental development. For example
, short videos in TikTok, which are thoroughly selected to attract adolescents, are filled with others’ perfect lives. Many kids feel frustrated after watching these videos and probably strive to keep up with each other. Furthermore
, this
can keep children
from concentrating on the things that really matter, such
as learning, sports and accompanying families. Imagine that people don’t communicate with each other and are immersed in their own virtual world, while
the real world becomes unreal, I think no one wants to see this
in the future.
In conclusion, some children
spend a large amount of time
on their phones every day because social media constantly presents them with content
designed to keep their attention. Sadly, this
can cause adverse influences on their mental health.Submitted by 474827656 on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite