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In some countries more and more people are interested in the history of the house or building they live in What are their reasons for this? How can they research on this?

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These days, there is a rise in the curiosity of members of
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society towards the historical story behind the apartment they inhabit.
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can be researched. The rise has been
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 an increase in the interest of people wanting to know the time the building was constructed in other to predict the type and the durability of the material used for the construction of the
house
.
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, most ancient houses were constructed using mud and a small quantity of cement which is not durable in
this
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 to know
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what the building stay in have been used for in the past and the type of people that lives in the apartment because it provides information about how well the building they are was maintained.
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, a building
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 used
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a
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 chemical industry if not properly cleaned
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can pose risk to the current inhabitants. Information about
history
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 of houses can be gotten from the owner of the
house
 or the agent who leased the apartment. It can
also
 be inscribed on the wall of the building. In conclusion,
interest
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 knowing the history of the
house
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should be encouraged because it helps potential tenants to make good choices.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Historical research
  • Genealogy
  • Architectural styles
  • Heritage
  • Relics
  • Oral history
  • Archival records
  • Museum exhibits
  • Historical societies
  • House tours
  • Renovation projects
  • Original blueprints
  • Careful documentation
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