Government should close companies that produce toxic waste materials without their own waste treatments facility in order to protect the environment. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

The phenomenon of
government
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proposing a new
environment
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environmental
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policy
to control all organizations that
releasing
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release
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any toxic materials before
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the purificational
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purificational
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purification
process has aroused wide concern among various circles. Divergent as people's views on
this
issue in question may be, I completely agree that any organization which do not
following
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the
policy
should be enforced to end their business. Of all the reasons why
government
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should establish strict policies to protect the environment, probably the most significant one is that show to the public the
government
's determination of alleviating the
polluation
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pollution
of production.
For example
, if the policies only required a fine for those
companies
who
violates
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the law, they may consider
to pay
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the
government
's fine rather than
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up a
purificational
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purification
facility. Since
,
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apply
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the waste
treatments
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treatment
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process take more resource than
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the penalties.
Hence
, the
policy
should not give any alternative for all
companies
to avoid the necessary movement. Another reason that should not be overlooked is that waste treatment is the responsibility of those
companies
who own the factories even though no law limits them.
However
, many
companies
igone
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ignore
gone
the aggravation of
enviromentional
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enviro mention al
polluation
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pollution
from their
productional
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production
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system.
For example
, many news about the lake where located a factory
cause
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the quality of water
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down and nearly
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the resdient
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resdient
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resident
residents
get
more sick
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than before the factory was
build
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up
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.
Therefore
, it is essential to make a law to control these
orgianzation
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organisations
. Under
this
line of thinking, it seems to me that
force
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companies
to close their business if they do not purify their waste before release or leak out is only
to
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aware the
companies
to
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apply
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take
their
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apply
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responsibility
to
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for
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the environment. So, I totally agree with
this
policy
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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