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In the future, more people will choose to go on hoilday in their own country and not travel aboard on hoilday. Do you agree or disagree?

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In general, people will choose to go on holiday in their own
country
due to
 certain reasons.
For instance
, Insecurities, currency exchange,
travel
 phobia and lack of funds. And
also
 family would love to visit their home towns, family and friends. On the other ,hand some crowd will choose to
travel
 aboard on holiday to experience a place they haven't been to before or a
country
. And
also
 for adventures, exploring places with wildlife animals
such
 as Kenya and more. Mostly, Not everyone can afford to
travel
 abroad for holidays. And some who can afford has different reasons or opinions on travelling aboard. some people feel insecure in another
country
.
for example
, Christians going to a Muslim
country
.
while
 some individuals have a phobia of heights by flying by plane or by driving long distances. And in some cases of currency exchange, when the value of your
country
 is lower than the value of the destination countries you visit.
Also
, speaking of elder people they rather choose to visit their home town, family and friend for reunions. Majorities of folk in their 20s prefer to tour around the globe. 70 per cent of the population choose to
travel
 out of their
country
 on holiday to have knowledge of what other countries look like, some for adventures, and
also
 for histories of things they had studied in the past.
while
 other public finds it entertaining travelling from one place to another. In my point of view, my age range, I am in my 20s. I would prefer to
travel
 around the
country
 to witness new places, have a new mindset on things, for adventures and
also
 to give numbers of countries visited for history purposes.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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