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the following graph shows the level of abuse in the UK between 2011 and 2012

the following graph shows the level of abuse in the UK between 2011 and 2012
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The bar chart provides an illustration of
abuse
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 percentage for both genders in the United Kingdom over a period of 2 years using 5 different categories ranging from partner
abuse
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 to domestic.
Overall
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, there is no doubt that the main feature of the data is that women had the primary form of suffering from all crime types,
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 men were the least exposed.
Initially
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, it is evident that females had amounted to the highest percentage of wrongdoing ,especially in domestic
abuse
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 amounting to just over 30%.
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, males who were exposed to sexual assault provided a negligible proportion comprising below 5%,
however
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, women in
this
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 type of
abuse
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 amounted to almost 20%. What is more, it is noticeable that family
abuse
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 for both genders amounted to roughly the same percentage which is less than 10%.
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, the (all) category in domestic
abuse
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 comprised almost 25% which means it is approximately the double amount of what it had amounted in stalking.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words abuse with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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