The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by the level of education for the years 2002 and 2010.

The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by the level of education for the years 2002 and 2010.
The first bar chart illustrates the percentage of people who have a
computer
from 2002 to 2010,
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and the
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second one shows data about personal
computer
ownership by the stage of education for the same period.
Overall
, it is obvious that the number of computers increased steadily
over all
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period which is easily compared with education level. The personal
computer
figures raised relatively from approximately 55 per cent in 2002 to around 75% in 2010. From the second
graph
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we can see that the percentage of
computer
ownership depends on the qualifications of the individual.
For example
, people who do not even
finished
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high school (40
per
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cent
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) have the least number at 15 % and,
on the other
hand
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postgraduate students
which
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accounted
90
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for 90
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% own the vast
percent
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at over 70.
According to
the information from the bar chart the high school graduates
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words computer with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend analysis
  • population demographics
  • educational attainment
  • disparities
  • technological advancement
  • digital divide
  • market penetration
  • socio-economic factors
  • predictive insights
  • statistical significance
  • longitudinal study
  • accessibility
  • affordability
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