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Immigration has a major impact on the society. What are the main reasons of immigration? To what consequences can it lead? Write at least 250 words.

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One of the timidest and most serious issues that have arisen in modern society is the issue of
immigration
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. It is a source of problems that need to be addressed.
Immigration
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 has a powerful impact on society.
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 is the socio-economic phenomenon that few
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 bypass. The phenomenon of the movement of
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 from one place of residence to another has become most acute in modern times. Before, few
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 cared about movement, and few could influence
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 weak border control. Now, the borders are heavily guarded, and the primarily illegal
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 of
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 is causing resentment among the government. The primary and foremost reason for
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 has been and is economic difficulties in the homeland.
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,
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 are forced to leave their homes and friends for food and a better life for themselves and their families in another country. Often,
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 illegal
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, these
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 are hired as cheap workers who are paid significantly less than ordinary workers and live very poorly.
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, their standard of living declines, and they often cannot find work. Workers,
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, are fired from their jobs, and,
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, they blame immigrants for the loss of their jobs,
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 the immigrants themselves have an unenviable standard of living
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 poor earnings. In conclusion,
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, which is often illegal, is driven by economic and social distress that forces
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 to leave their homes and travel to another country where they are almost always treated unfairly.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic migration
  • Asylum seeker
  • Diaspora
  • Expatriate
  • Refugee status
  • Work permit/visa
  • Demographic shift
  • Naturalization
  • Xenophobia
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Multiculturalism
  • Social cohesion
  • Immigration policies
  • Border control
  • Undocumented immigrants
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