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write a letter to the manager of the library. In your letter: explain why the library is important to you describe how the reduced hours would affect you suggest what the library could do instead of reducing hours Write at least 150 word

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing regarding the decision to reduce the opening hours of the local
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, which I believe will negatively affect many people in our town, including myself. I recently learned that the
library
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 will close earlier on weekdays and remain completely closed on weekends. I am extremely disappointed with
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 decision because many residents work during the weekdays and only have time to visit the
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 in the evenings or on weekends. As a student and working professional, I often use the
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 to study, complete assignments, and work in a peaceful environment whenever I feel too exhausted to work from home or my workplace.
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 of reducing the opening hours, I would like to suggest a few alternative solutions.
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, the
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organize
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 fundraising events or accept donations from local residents, as I am confident many people in the community would support
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 an important public service.
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, the management could consider hiring part-time staff members to help manage operational costs more effectively. I kindly request that you reconsider
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 decision, as the
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 plays a significant role in helping people learn, grow, and stay connected within the community. Yours faithfully, Ayush Shukla

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task response
For task response: Add one more clear detail about how the new time would hurt your own study or work.
task response
For task response: Your ideas are good, but one point could be more full with an example.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: The letter is easy to follow. To make it even better, link one idea to the next with simple words like also, so, or because.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: Most paragraphs have one main idea. Keep this style in all letters.
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For task response: You answer all parts of the task clearly.
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For task response: Your tone is polite and right for a letter to a manager.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: The letter has a clear start, middle, and end.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: Your greeting and closing are correct and formal.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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