Nowadays, even though imprisonment is an efficient solution for preventing crime, education proved to be a more efficient one. Do you agree or disagree?

Currently, some

offenders

are jailed for their crimes which set an example for the person involved in illegal activity and other people in society that breaking the law can result in negative consequences.

However

, it has been proved that rehabilitating people involved in criminal acts through

education

alleviates their negative thoughts and gives them a purpose in life that can be beneficial for them and indirectly for society,

thus

preventing

crime

. Considering my thoughts, I do not fully agree that

education

is the sole effective method for preventing atrocity. Undoubtedly,

jail

keeps society safe from

offenders

Education

can still be provided inside the

jail

For instance

, many countries have structured

education

programs for

offenders

that are taught inside the

jail

. The

education

program comprises basic subjects

such

as English, maths, and science and skill development courses. There are days in a week in which teachers are hired to give skills training to the

offenders

in imprisonment

for example

cooking and sewing classes.

As a result

this

education

, many criminals can develop positive personalities and skills that can help them earn bread in the future once they are released from

jail

Although

the combination of imprisonment and

education

has proved to be very beneficial in declining the rate of

crime

, there is a certain

crime

that requires strict punishments inside jails.

For instance

, serial killers or terrorists with so many murders on their hands must need the death penalty and strict

jail

rules so that

this

barbaric act can be prevented by setting

such

people as symbols of misery because of their unforgivable acts. In

such

cases,

education

has the least effect on preventing

such

crime

To conclude

education

is very important in grooming a man’s character and making him learn the difference between good and bad.

However

, some

crime

needs strict penalties and imprisonment for preventing crimes.

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