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Many people think that hard work and dedication are essential for success. Others believe money and personal acceptance are more important

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It is certainly true that there are numerous factors behind every
success
. Some
people
 deem that hard
work
 and persistence are the primary factors which help a person to achieve
success
 but others argue that financial status and looks are more important. In my opinion, both views are valid as a combination of perseverance and
money
 is needed to achieve
success
.
People
 have valid reasons to support the view that hard
work
 and ambition are the main
key
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 to
success
 in life.
Firstly
, everyone has to do hard
work
 to acquire knowledge and experience because one can receive
money
 and support from
one’s
 family but, to get experience and skills one has to make efforts on
one’s
 own.
For instance
, students have to study to pass the examinations; their parents cannot study on their behalf.
Secondly
, no target can be achieved without determination because persistence is the key to victory. So, one must have
a
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strong
will power
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willpower
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 to give
one’s
 hundred
percent
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per cent
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 to a goal.
On the other hand
,
people
 who advocate that good looks and
money
 are important for
success
 believe that good looks increase
one’s
 confidence which is a predominant factor of
success
. Nobody can accomplish even a small task
,
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 if they do not consider themselves capable.
Therefore
, confidence is a must to win every race.
Apart from
this
,
money
 is considered important because it provides initial support to start a career.
People
 who are not financially secure / stable have to start things from scratch. In
this
 way,
money
 saves
time
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 and energy of initiators. To wrap up,
people
 have to face so many difficulties to achieve
success
 and not all problems can be tackled by
money
 or hard
work
 alone.
That is
 why I think that all factors are important to be successful.
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