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Some people think that the media have to right to publish detail of people’s view, while other thinks it should be controlled. Discuss both views.

#people #media #right #detail #people’s
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peoples
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people's
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 daily lives in the past few years, so everyone has
platform
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 to share his opinion on any matter without any restrictions.
Media
,
such
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media
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 thoughts on different themes. Since
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type
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 of
media
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 easily accessible online,
people
 tend to read and watch
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 more often, so demand for new materials is greater. That puts larger pressure on
media
 sources to publish more things. In
this
 process journalists and reporters publish subjective
opinions
 of individuals because they want to support the right of free thinking of every single person. Some
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 agree with their point of view
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 since we know how destroying restriction of freedom of
media
 and thinking can be. One of the best examples is the forbidement of free reporting that brought to misleading
of
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the whole nation and great war crimes in Germany during the Second World War.
On the other hand
, some
people
 consider that
publishing
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 of
peoples
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 thoughts should be restricted or controlled. Some
of
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the
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media
 workers very often forget how great their impact can be on
their
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 public, so if they publish
peoples
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people's
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 personal
opinions
 those can be
intepreted
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interpreted
 as an objective understanding of the problem by the readers or watchers. One of the examples is
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antivactination
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antivaccination
anti-vaccination
 propaganda
that is
 happening in Europe nowadays. We can find
opinions
 of
people
 that are against vaccination published in reputable
media
 without explanation or objectivation of the problem. In conclusion, both views on
this
 matter are correct. Restricting
of
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free publishing can be very dangerous for society, same as the publishing of
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facts that are not
clearafied
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clarified
cleared
 as a subjective view, so
media
 workers should be aware that they can be responsible for
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 of
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 great number of
people
 on certain issues.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Freedom of Expression
  • Public Interest
  • Misinformation
  • Manipulation
  • Invasion of Privacy
  • Sensitive Information
  • Social Harmony
  • Incite
  • Hatred
  • Accountability
  • Ethical Standards
  • Sensationalism
  • Regulation
  • Unrestricted
  • Public Panic
  • Well-rounded opinion
  • Disseminate
  • Extreme Views
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