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In the future, more people will choose to go on holidays in their own country, and not to travel aboard on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

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Generally, most people would love to spend their holidays in their home country rather than travel aboard for holidays.
While
 other individuals will choose to travel abroad for holidays. For the purpose of
this
 essay, my point of view, I will agree and
also
 disagree with certain examples. In the case of workload, taking a trip will clear your mind and makes you think straight. Some personnel make a journey around the globe for personal reasons.
For instance
, for adventures, going around visiting every develop and civilians places. For tourism, going to countries
such
 as Kenya is known to be a place of wildlife. For research, to visit ancient civilizations. For knowledge, to learn new things about different locations you explore.
However
, some families will prefer to spend their leisure time touring around their home town to reunite with old friends and other family members they haven't seen in years.
while
 other folks choose to remain in their local area for other reasons.
For example
, currency exchange is when your country's currency value is lower than the destination value. For insecurities, leaving your Christian society to a Muslim society.
Furthermore
, most youth in their 20s would prefer to leave their region to experience other communities and
also
 tour around the world to see new things which actually helps the mindset.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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