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Wild animals have no place in the 21st century, so protecting them is a waste of resources. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, most
people
 believe that there are no more spaces for
wildlife
 to stay and to keep living for their life, and spending money on them is not a good idea. I totally disagree with
this
 point of view, and
this
 essay will talk about why they are vital to our survival. I would say that the planet where we live is designed to coexist with
animals
 and humans by nature.
However
, in modern, lots of
people
 who are blinded by worldly desires think that nature is one of the measures to earn money. Especially, deforestation is a good example. If humans destroy forests, habitats for
wildlife
 disappear. And
also
, the lack of places for wild
animals
 arise enormous problems
such
 as endangered. These big issues related to wild creatures lead to destroying ecosystems. In order to save their habitats,
people
 should stop deforestation and overgraze anymore from now on.
In addition
,
according to
 a study by the University of British Columbia, they claim that to conserve wild
animals
 can get some benefits in many ways. First of all, they would say that
people
 can make money as a financial method.
This
 is because of selling
animals
 in the market.
second,
animals
 can share food and nutrient with
people
 by sacrificing themselves.
Lastly
, preserving
wildlife
's habitats can keep the ecosystem. keeping the ecosystem on the planet can help
people
 for living in clean water , pure air and regulation climate. For all of those reasons,
people
 should struggle to save
wildlife
 and their habitat in the long run. In conclusion, personally, we have a responsibility to save species and conserve all natural things, and it will be mutually beneficial for humans and
animals
.
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