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should children be allowed to make decisions. describe your opinion showing merit and demits for the same

#children #decisions #merit #demits
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children
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 should be allowed to make their
decision
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 in some matters. but based on their
decision
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 mistake should be taken under their guardian's surroundings so that their guardian is
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 aware that the
decision
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 that they are making is good and based on some relevance not out of some silly influence.
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should
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children
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 be allowed to make
decisionsdecision
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decisions decision
 themselves.
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, It will be beneficial to allow
children
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 to make
decisionsdecision
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decisions decision
 themselves so that the
children
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 make
mistakes
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 and learn from them. In
much
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 psychological pieces of
evidence
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 it is been proven that
children
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 learn from their
mistakes
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 and improve themselves by observing how a habit and curiosity affect them.
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, Human evolution is based on doing
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, observation and improvisation, it can
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 be described as how a baby learns how a walk. A baby tries
thousands
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 times, makes
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 and improves himself, and learns to walk.
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, riding a bicycle and many other things.
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, Allowing offspring to make a
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 and
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 turn into chaos and
destroys
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destroy
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 a child's life,
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instance
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 offspring and drugs, In 2013 a survey proves that out of 1000 students above 75 students
becomes
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prey to drug abuse and
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further
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 life participants in crimes.
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, In 2015 several studies on teenagers proves that several students
becomes
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 addicted to adult videos or porn content, leading to a low fertility rate in their later stages of life, which is
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 a proven cause of anxiety and depression. Allowing
children
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 in making decisions can be a boon and a curse.
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children
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 should be allowed to make decisions on their own but under supervision. And if
a
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children
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 make
mistakes
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guardian
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 should make them aware that they are making a mistake.
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