There are many types of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Do you think the traditional music of a country is more important and should it be preserved or international music that is heard everywhere nowadays more useful to a society?
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people
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people
to maintain their mental health. Use synonyms
People
in the past used Use synonyms
music
in some celebrations. Use synonyms
For instance
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muslim
used to play some drum Change the capitalization
Muslim
instrument
and sang salutations to celebrate the birth of their prophet. Fix the agreement mistake
instruments
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music
genres like R&B, rock, and classical affect Use synonyms
people
's preferences to hear Use synonyms
music
. They used to hear those kinds kind of Use synonyms
music
in their leisure time or to relax after they did a job in the workplace. Use synonyms
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music
, I believe traditional Use synonyms
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it represents Linking Words
history
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the history
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people
in the past. Modern Use synonyms
music
gives a Use synonyms
relax
sensation Change the form of the verb
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for
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to
people
when they listen to it. Use synonyms
However
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people
in the past have so Use synonyms
many
traditional Correct quantifier usage
much
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music
that must be considered Change to a plural noun
musics
to preserve
. Change the verb form
preserved
For instance
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have
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has
their
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its
cultures
because of that many Fix the agreement mistake
culture
tourist
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tourists
interested
to come to Indonesia. If the Government did not preserve Add a missing verb
are interested
these
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this
culture
, Fix the agreement mistake
cultures
people
nowadays will Use synonyms
do
not know about history. Unnecessary verb
apply
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, Linking Words
government
should preserve the traditional Add an article
the government
music
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To sum up
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people
used Use synonyms
music
in celebration and they listen to it to maintain their mental health after work. Use synonyms
Although
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people
today prefer to Use synonyms
listen
modern Add the preposition
tolisten
music
, it is important for Use synonyms
government
to keep their traditional Add an article
the government
music
as a heritage from Use synonyms
people
in the past.Use synonyms
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