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Some experts believe that it is better for children to beign learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages.

#experts #children #beign #language #school #outweigh
Nowadays people
knows
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 multiple foreign
languages
 because of communication
in
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 foreign clients. So, Many experts argue that children start learning a foreign
language
at
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 primary grades rather than secondary school. There are both merits and demerits for start learning foreign
languages
 at primary standards. In recent times,
scientist
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 believes that
learn
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learning
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a new
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a new language
new languages
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languages
its
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is
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 better to start
learn
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 at little age but,
i
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I
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 believe that
its
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it's
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 difficult to learn multiple
languages
 at primary age because
its
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it's
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 hard to pronounce and communicate with foreign
language
 and they
mixup
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mix up
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languages
 and outweigh the miss communication.
However
,
its
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it's
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 truly said that
ages
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the ages
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 of 0 -10
is
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 best for
learn
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learning
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a
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apply
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new things and easily
absorb
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 new information.
While
,
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teenager
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a teenager
the teenager
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 who starts learn learning foreign
languages
 at secondary school found
its
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it
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 hard to learn. Students only focus on learning new
languages
 and forgot about
another subjects
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.
Furthermore
, certain specialists
argues
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 that secondary
schools
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school
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 students find it hard to learn another
language
 because they master
in
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apply
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pronunciation and
knows
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know
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 more synonyms in their native
language
.
Moreover
, pupils who
knows
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 multiple
languages
overcomes
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 results in other fields and they find out easily employment in future. But,
peop
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people
 In conclusion, people
starts
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 their children to learn
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