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The graph shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.

The graph shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.
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The line graph illustrates information about the
consumption
 of fish and some different kinds of meat in Europe.  The data is measured in grams from 1979 to 2004.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 the amount of
breef
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beef
brief
 and lamb
consumption
 followed
downward
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a downward
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 trend over the period shown.
However
, the same figure for chicken and fish followed upward and unchanged trends respectively. In 1979 around
210 gram
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210-gram
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beef
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of beef
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consumption
used
Add a missing verb
was used
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 to intake,
however
,
this
 figure experienced a decline to about 100 in the following 25 years.
Moreover
, lamb
consumption
 experienced a
sharply
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sharp
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 decline from 150 to
well-over
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well over
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 500 grams in the given period. Remarkably,
the
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apply
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chicken
consumption
 was nearly 150 when the span started.
This
 figure rose exponentially to reach
high
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a high
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 of about 250 till the final year, having the highest position in the group.  Despite the
consumption
 of fish
fluctuated
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fluctuating
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, it remained
nearly
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at nearly
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 50 till the final year.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • fish
  • meat
  • poultry
  • beef
  • lamb
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • gradual
  • significant
  • fluctuate
  • peak
  • trough
  • steady
  • correlation
  • period
  • data
  • comparison
  • predominant
  • kilograms per capita
  • dietary habits
  • health consciousness
  • sustainability
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