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The graph below shows the average conaumption of cheese in England, Scotland, Wales and Northern Ireland between 1980 and 2020.

The graph below shows the average conaumption of cheese in England, Scotland, Wales and Northern Ireland between 1980 and 2020.
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an
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 average intake of
cheese
 per person in 4 different countries  namely
England
, Scotland, Wales and Northern Ireland between 1980 and 2020. The units are measured on
killograms
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kilograms
  per person.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 there
were
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 a   dramatic growth in Wales and Northern Ireland
on
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in
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 the number of 
cheese
 consumption.
While
,
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  the same share for
England
 and Scotland  decreased respectively In the initial
year
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 the
cheese
 consumption per person was around 20
killograms
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kilograms
 in Northern Ireland and
this
 figure increased to 55 until the end of
period
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.
Furthermore
, the same share for Wales  too experienced 
a
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dramatic growth from  45 to just over 75 until the end of
period
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. In stark
contrast
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 the quantity of
cheese
 consumption in
England
  and Scotland decreased .
Although
,
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 the number of  consumed
cheese
 witnessed  a dramatic growth till 1990, it possessed the lowest point among others.
While
England
 had  a slight  decrease until the end of
period
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approxmately
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approximately
 from 120 to 80.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cheese, england with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 3 times.
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