Some people think that social networking sites have a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, social media has
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adverse effect on
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society and particular individuals.I
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complete
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agreement with
this
opinion
due to
social media will bring some unhealthy
addiction
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and separate
people
in society.
Firstly
, the effect of social media has had some advantages for each
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.
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:
people
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in other country are used
such
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sites
such
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as Instagram ,Telegram,
Facebook
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and Facebook
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.
People
had the chance to meet or communicate with anyone outside or with
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person
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of
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community
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.
Secondly
, on
web
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sites
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we can see
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chatting groups which offer
people
to chance to meet and participate in discussions with
people
who share
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interest
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.
Thirdly
, the effect that social networking
sites
have had on societies can only be seen as negative.Most
people
are choosing to take more interest in
people
online.
In addition
, the
community
are no longer forming
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or supportive relationship.They spend more time online with
people
they have never met face to face in the real life . In conclusion, social networking
sites
have brought
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closer but the local
community
should do more
invole
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involve
people
in local activities in order to enhance
community
life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social isolation
  • virtual interactions
  • mental health
  • feelings of inadequacy
  • anxiety
  • depression
  • misinformation
  • destabilize
  • privacy concerns
  • data breaches
  • productivity
  • foster connections
  • educational content
  • social activism
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