The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.
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expenditures of their weekly income in a country between 1968 and 2018.
Overall
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, their spending in almost all units changed
at the end
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of
period
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.
In addition
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, food was the highest item that
families
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spent on their weekly income at the beginning of
period
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the period
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,
while
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leisure replaced it
at the end
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. Having stood at 35% of weekly income in 1968, the percentage of
families
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spending on food was the most favourable one, followed by that of housing and clothing and
footware
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footwear
, at 10%.
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, other sectors were roughly under 9%. In 2018, despite having
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almost 9%
in
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the beginning of the year, the proportion of
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expenditures on leisure outnumbered other types, peaking at about 23% of
weekly
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the weekly
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wage.
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, the intensity of
families
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spending on transport and housing increased dramatically, almost doubling.
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, the
families
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spent on fuel and power, clothing and
footware
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footwear
, and personal goods decreased in
this
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year, accounting for under 5%,
while
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that of household goods remained stable during the periods.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end, in addition, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words families with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Weekly income
  • Expenditure
  • Consumption patterns
  • Cost of living
  • Discretionary spending
  • Inflation
  • Economic indicators
  • Demographics
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Technology advancements
  • Government policies
  • Consumerism
  • Lifestyle changes
  • Fiscal habits
  • Budget allocation
  • Financial priorities
  • Societal trends
  • Purchasing power
  • Income distribution
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