Some people think certain prisoners should be made to do unpaid community work instead of being put behind bars. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Undoubtedly, punishing culprits for their offences is essential to maintain decorum in any country. Some
people
opine that putting criminals behind the bars
is not the only solution. They should rather be involved in community work
. This
essay will discuss the advantages of this
perspective and conclude with my opinion.
To commence with, a few people
get imprisonment for their misdeeds but they do not cause any major threat to society due to
the nature of their crimes like pick-pocketing, chain snatching, domestic violence and robbery. They can be put behind the bars
for a certain period and then
given a chance to improve. However
, these kinds of prisoners can be improved by involving in certain activities rather than putting them behind the bars
. For example
, "an empty mind is a devil workshop" so, If they remain idle, doing nothing in the bars
, they will think negatively and plan to attempt offence even after being released from prison but, if they will be indulged in community work
, they will remain busy and do not get chance to think evil.
Secondly
, few people
attempt small crimes because they do not have any job or work
to do. Including them in some work
will help them find a suitable job after, they will be released from their punishment and it will eventually increase the scope of improvisation and make them better human beings. For example
, they can be involved in construction, cleaning and gardening.
In a nutshell, I firmly agree with the group of people
who believe that this
phenomenon involves a positive outcome to bring change into society and the government should make some preventive measures to implement this
activity in future.Submitted by jessica.dawyer on
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