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some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss bothe these views and give your opinion

#people #information #research #business #world #bothe
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informational data holds a significant value that makes some
people
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to
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think that
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"no
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 should be given out without a price".
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other
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 believe that all informational
knowledge
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 should be provided to all.
People
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 who believe that
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 data should be accessible
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 everyone are correct in their own eyes. Because most
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the
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humans live in a democratic country and hold their rights to
information
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 , speech and media. It will be a great help for our society if all the
information
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 about academic, scientific and business achievements were made available to everyone without any fee, it would be beneficial for all. As
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 would have a chance to develop new skills and have a greater spectrum of
knowledge
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.
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, it will only be possible in an ideal
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.
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, we don't live in a perfect
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.
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these
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time
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people
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 would certainly not share any valuable
knowledge
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 without charging any fees. And I do agree with it,
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, there are
people
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 on social media platforms like YouTube, Freelancer, Skillshare and many more who sell their
knowledge
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 of developing skills for a price. In my ,opinion
knowledge
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 holds a supreme value and should not be given away.
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, in
modern
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world
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 access to certain
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in
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 not free because many individuals want to make
profit
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a profit
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 out of their own skills and
knowledge
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, there
also
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 are some
people
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 who share their
knowledge
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 out of goodwill.
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