Some people think that the ideal parents are strict disciplinarians who keep their children on the straight and narrow path with firm yet loving control. Others argue that ideal parents form loving bonds with their children through a relationship closer to friendship and a less authoritarian approach.

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The problem of parenting and the relationship between
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and
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tormented the minds of many people for generations: people do not stop arguing about which model of interaction with a
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is the most effective. Some consider that it is necessary to grow up
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in severe conditions and austere limitations, but I strongly believe that raising kids in
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and affirmative atmosphere is the best option. To start with, it is essentially important for every parent to know about their
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to prevent them from unpleasant or even dangerous situations, and for
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it is necessary that the
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trusts his
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and feels secure with them. The
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's unformed psychology forces him or her to be driven by
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a feeling as fear, and constant strictness and firmness in the family make the
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more isolated and private, so as not to anger or disappoint the
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once again. In the meantime, if the
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is assured that the
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will understandingly and calmly treat his mistakes, he or she will definitely tell the
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about his problems.
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, a
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and especially a teenager
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to socialize in society, experience new activities, expand their horizons, and not act on the orders of their
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. The
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should have freedom for self-realization, because,
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way they will be able to truly determine the vector of
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development and,
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, remain grateful to their
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for having been given all the opportunities for
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risk losing not only the trust of their
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but
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communication with them when they grow up. And
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but not least, history knows many cases when the strictness of
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led in the long run to mental health issues. Severity is often accompanied by quarrels and punishments, which make the
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traumatized. His or her perception of reality may be formed incorrectly, which can cause diseases
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as depression, neurosis or worse. Raising a
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in a friendly atmosphere of love and understanding,
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him an adequate amount of freedom is much less capable of traumatizing the psyche.
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, being a good parent is an essential problem of many generations, but there is still no
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working formula. But I strongly believe that raising
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without excessive
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and restrictions has more advantages than the opposite model of
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