Some people think that the ideal parents are strict disciplinarians who keep their children on the straight and narrow path with firm yet loving control. Others argue that ideal parents form loving bonds with their children through a relationship closer to friendship and a less authoritarian approach.

The problem of parenting and the relationship between
children
and
parents
have
been
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tormented the minds of many people for generations: people do not stop arguing about which model of interaction with a
child
is the most effective. Some consider that it is necessary to grow up
children
in severe conditions and austere limitations, but I strongly believe that raising kids in
friendly
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and affirmative atmosphere is the best option. To start with, it is essentially important for every parent to know about their
children
’s
life
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to prevent them from unpleasant or even dangerous situations, and for
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it is necessary that the
child
trusts his
parents
and feels secure with them. The
child
's unformed psychology forces him or her to be driven by
such
a feeling as fear, and constant strictness and firmness in the family make the
child
more isolated and private, so as not to anger or disappoint the
parents
once again. In the meantime, if the
child
is assured that the
parents
will understandingly and calmly treat his mistakes, he or she will definitely tell the
parents
about his problems.
Moreover
, a
child
and especially a teenager
needs
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to socialize in society, experience new activities, expand their horizons, and not act on the orders of their
parents
. The
child
should have freedom for self-realization, because,
firstly
,
this
way they will be able to truly determine the vector of
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development and,
secondly
, remain grateful to their
parents
for having been given all the opportunities for
this
.
Otherwise
,
parents
risk losing not only the trust of their
children
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but
also
communication with them when they grow up. And
last
but not least, history knows many cases when the strictness of
parents
led in the long run to mental health issues. Severity is often accompanied by quarrels and punishments, which make the
child
traumatized. His or her perception of reality may be formed incorrectly, which can cause diseases
such
as depression, neurosis or worse. Raising a
child
in a friendly atmosphere of love and understanding,
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him an adequate amount of freedom is much less capable of traumatizing the psyche.
To sum up
, being a good parent is an essential problem of many generations, but there is still no
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working formula. But I strongly believe that raising
children
without excessive
rigor
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and restrictions has more advantages than the opposite model of
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.
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