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The chart below shows the number of travellers using three major airports in New York City between 1995 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below shows the number of travellers using three major airports in New York City between 1995 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The bar graph presents information about the volume of tourists in three leading airports, namely
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F
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.
Kennedy
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, LaGuardia, and Newark. The data compare figures collected from 1995 to 2000.
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, it can be noted that LaGuardia had the highest record of visitors all throughout the period except in 1997, when the greatest
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 was noted
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by
John
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F
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Kennedy
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airport
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.
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, the
number
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 of visitors at
John
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F
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Kennedy
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 showed a fluctuating trend
while
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 the rest depicted a general upward pattern. In detail, during the first year, LaGuardia started at around 35
million
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 passengers, which was the highest at that time compared to its counterparts. Following that period, there was a gradual increase in the
number
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 of visitors reaching up to 50
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 in 1999 before it
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2000 with nearly 70
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, which was almost twice as much as the initial record. The second highest account in 1995, which was approximately 26
million
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, was set by
John
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F
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.
Kennedy
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airport
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. The succeeding two years saw
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continuous growth in numbers until 1997 when it reached its highest at roughly 48
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.
This
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 figure,
however
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, went on a decline until 1999 before it rose again to an
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of
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42
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 in the final year. Meanwhile, there was an uninterrupted increase in the
number
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 of passengers in Newark
airport
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 from 1995 to 1998, starting at approximately 15
million
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 and climbing to just over 40
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 after three years. The latter figure remained unchanged for another two years.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words john, f, kennedy, number, airport, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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