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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of diverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages.

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Nowadays, thanks to mesmerizing technological advancements, the prospect of
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 vehicles, be it
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, buses, trucks, etc., is no longer merely imaginative.
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 innovation may lead to a couple of drawbacks, the spectacular advantages will undoubtedly outweigh the negative effects. On the one hand, there are a couple of inevitable unwanted consequences accompanying fully automatic vehicles.
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, when
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 are not in control of their
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 or trucks, they risk their safety
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 unknown reasons. Up to now, no organizations or
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 can guarantee absolute confidence in
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 automotive technology, which means there are still chances computer programs are subjected to programming mistakes, viruses or cyber-attacks, etc.
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, the takeover of robots in driving will lead to unemployment for thousands of
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 whose careers are to
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 behind the wheel.
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, the above-mentioned potential disadvantages are not sufficient to discourage
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 from enjoying the enormous benefits brought by autopilot technology. Most of the current traffic accidents stem from the recklessness of human-based drivers, and
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 an issue will be few and far between when computers are in charge because programs are simply immune from physical tiredness or carelessness. Even though
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cars
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 are vulnerable to cyber attacks or viruses, studies and statistics have shown that the rate is negligibly low. Needless to say, when travelling gets automatic,
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 will save lots of time to do productive things
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 as reading a book, watching a movie, chatting with beloved family members, etc.,
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 waiting to get to their destinations. And
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 are more likely to be evenly distributed when they navigate on their own, which can help reduce traffic jams, a worrying problem in big cities in the world today. In conclusion,
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 future of autopilot vehicles is closer than ever before thanks to technological development.
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 the concerns of
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 regarding the drawbacks of
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cars
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 are understandable, they are convincingly outweighed by the benefits of safer and less exhausting driving.
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