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Some people think the media should not report details of crime to the public. What extent do you agree or disagree.

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Reporting, details of the
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media
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people
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 think it should stop.
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,there are advantages and disadvantages. In my opinion , I suggest ,that the
media
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 should report information about
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crime
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the crime
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 to
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 since there can be fewer incidents and cases in the near future.
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, not accepting the fact of hiding the
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.If we are able to aware
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 of what's exactly , going on within
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, It can help anyone coming
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future and today.
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,If
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 think the
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 should not report details to
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 it will cause many problems ,
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, In the UK there was a
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 scene happening to an eight-year-old girl called Natasha
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Campus
. The person who kidnapped her mentioned not to utter a word to the world ,If she does,It will be disgraced their family background .criminal was so smart to convince her. In
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 ,case I personally,think that we should advise children to be more careful and smart. whatever
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 happens, around them ,parents should be the
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to know what's happening in their children's life.
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,If we disagree with the fact
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that
people
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 insist,
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 can happen. In the first ,point of the explanation, I have mentioned an example , regarding a criminal case of a girl and how we should alert the children who are within us . If we do the proper needful. It can be a safe ride to go with our lives.
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, disagreeing is best, for
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 who think the
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 should not report about the day to day, crimes to
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 for the betterment of
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 and for the future.
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