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In some contries, most people perfer to rent thier homes rather than buying them. What are the advantages and disadvantage of renting a home?

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In a few countries,a large number of masses make the choice to tariff their
home
instead
 of purchasing them.
according to
 my individuals should have to prefer a
house
according to
 their needs. on the one hand,buying a
home
 has a plethora of benefits.
Firstly
,houses work as an asset for a person and must be used in an unavoidable worse situation.For ,example many
people
 sell their buildings when they have a need of
money
 for a medical emergency or education.
secondly
,If a person has to own a
house
 they make it
according to
 their needs but if we choose a rental
house
 we have to adjust
on
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 someone else
need
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needs
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.
Besides
 ,
that
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 if we have our own
house
then
 we
also
 give our property on rent in order to make
money
.
on the other hand
,despite the fact owning a
house
 has enormous benefits but
people
 make
choice
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according to
 their financial situation because many employers do have not enough
money
 to own a
house
 but they want their own
house
 as in result they take a huge amount of
home
 loan which was very difficult to repay for them.
Furthermore
, the purpose of the building is equally important to make decisions
due to
 the fact that a small family having 2 or 3
people
 in urban areas can easily manage to live in a rental apartment to save a large sum of
money
.
moreover
,the cost of maintenance is significantly high as compared to
home
 on lease.
thus
, the masses having low budgets always go for the rental options. In conclusion,
Although
 owning a
home
 has a large number of benefits,
people
 have weak financials
then
 they have to pick up rental properties.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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