Discipline is an ever increasing problem in modern school. Some people think that discipline should be the responsibility of teachers while others think that this it the role of parents. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Discipline
is a growing issue in
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places
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. Certain
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individuals
believe that
teachers
are answerable for
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strickness
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strictness
.
However
, others consider that it is
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the parents
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parents
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job to do it. Mainly it is
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parents
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responsibility for their child's
discipline
since they are the main
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in
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life.
In addition
, descendants look up to them.
Teachers
are
ones
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the ones
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that help pupils to develop and gain knowledge about basic things like
discipline
, manners, respect and
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.
However
, they are not the
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parents
need to blame when their
offspings
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offsprings
offspring
can not control
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themselves
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.
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Teachers
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job is to give information. They should not be in charge of that. In my school
teachers
only worried about our academic achievements and knowledge. They did not care about
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good
behaviour. They thought that
while
we learn we get smart, and if we are smart we will
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understand
what is right and what is wrong,
as well as
, what we should do and should not. Being a parent means doing your best to teach your children how they need to behave. From an early
age
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they tell
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babies about self-control and self-
discipline
. It is
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job to do it. They have
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rights to blame tutors for that. As
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said before
teachers
main responsibility is to educate general
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knowledge
not behaviour basics. My
parents
tought
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taught
thought
me that I need to keep myself in
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one hand
. They made me
to
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understand the rules
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need to obey and
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I need to do. As I grew up
this general things
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became simple for me.
In addition
, I want to say that
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now
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it is normal for me. In conclusion, I want
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to
say that only
parents
should be in control of their
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offspring's
discipline
.
Teacher
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are not in control
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that. All they need to do is
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provide
good academia. Since mothers and fathers are
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mains
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charachters
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characters
in their
chldren's
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children's
life they need to be the ones who need to direct them.
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