In many countries, school-age children are spending their free time in doing homework. Is it a good or bad thing? What is your opinion? Give examples to support your view.

Looking at the age of six to twelve students are spending their leisure
time
doing ,homework in many countries.
This
explains,
about
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both good and bad.
Firstly
,
children
spending their free
time
doing homework is
a
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good ,so they can improve their knowledge more.
On the other hand
,
children
should have a
balance
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schedule to do their extracurricular activities rather than focusing mainly
studies
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.they should always have a
balance
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ladder.
Secondly
,
disadvantage
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also
can occur
due to
more studying ,in leisure
time
.
children
will
loose
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their focus to do extracurricular.
For example
, playing
time
( football, swimming and many more ).without being a study holic students can have a balanced mixed ladder for their future . In my opinion, I think
children
in all countries should have a balanced schedule for studies and
extracurricular
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too. Willingly they can have a happy future and a happy life .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • academic performance
  • time management
  • stress and burnout
  • mental health
  • holistic development
  • extracurricular activities
  • parental involvement
  • socioeconomic disparities
  • reinforces
  • understanding
  • valuable skill
  • engage
  • inequitable
  • resources
  • support
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