the two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010

the two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010
The two given maps illustrate the idea to access a City hospital through a
road
in the years 2007 and 2010. It suggests a developmental plan for a health premise with its nearby areas and the construction of new infrastructure.
Overall
, the first figure denotes the hospital in 2007 and its connectivity with the city
road
that connects the main hospital
road
, with few facilities close to it.
However
, the other blueprint for 2010 tells us about some
overall
changes for better accessibility to the health care centre with more modification in the parking areas and construction of new amenities. In the year 2007, it shows that the Health Center was surrounded by a ring
road
from all directions starting from the south, west leading to the north, east and provides an opening to the parking area for all (staff and public) together which is adjacent to the main entrance in the south again. The main entrains begin with the hospital
road
leading in the same direction to continue with the main street. The bus stand remains at a distance
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northeast of the hospital.
On the other hand
figure from the year 2010 creates a new and developed picture of the same place adding a roundabout on the main entrance to the nearby
road
in the south which leads to the other roundabout at a certain distance that gives connectivity to the main lane. These circular paths allow reachability to the newly constructed bus stand near the hospital at its southwest. ,
Also
the ring
road
now provides the care centre with two different exits one at the east for public car parking and the other as same as before but strictly for the staff member, in the south.
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  • accessibility
  • dual carriageway
  • roundabout
  • traffic flow
  • multi-story car park
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian provisions
  • footpaths
  • traffic signals
  • construction phase
  • ambulances
  • carriageway expansion
  • traffic congestion
  • pedestrian crossings
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure development
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