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The development of tourism contributed to English becoming the most prominent lexical in the world. Some people think this will lead to English becoming only language to be spoken globally. Advantages and disadvantages?

#development #tourism #english #world #people #language
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common
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worldwide
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 and even online applications
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 we can not deny their cons and pros in the whole
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. On one hand ,
english
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 is extremely important and has a lot of
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 in terms of education and health sectors , the global economy and trading exchange ,
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 empowerment because it facilities the relations within countries ,
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 the development of tourism which
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 citizens to learn it in order to explore other cultures ,customs and
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, it decreases the rate of
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languages
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 and deteriorate the rhythm of life .
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, all languages are important to maintain a balance and now
english
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 is preponderant and its usage
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 the global areas is
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 to interlinked relations between counties .

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Prominent
  • Lexical
  • Global language
  • Improved communication
  • Understanding
  • Economic benefits
  • Educational opportunities
  • Information and knowledge
  • Global business
  • Professional opportunities
  • Cultural diversity
  • Linguistic heritage
  • Linguistic inequality
  • Language and power imbalance
  • Limited access to information
  • Threat to minority languages
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