The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates alterations between the percentage of
people
who were born inside and outside of Australia living in urban, rural, and towns in 1995 and 2010.
Overall
, the majority of
people
were born in cities in both years
while
the percentage of
people
decreased in the metropolis and rural areas in 2010. An initial analysis of the charts demonstrates that in 1995, the number of newborns in Australia accounted for approximately 50% and it has gradually increased to roughly 65% in 2010.
Whereas
, in the metropolis and rural areas, the birth rate was 20% and 30%, respectively.
However
, the rate declined over the next 15 years to around 18% for both categories.
On the other hand
, non-Australian births accounted for 60% in 1995 and rose to 80% in 2010.
Nonetheless
, the number of humans from rural areas was dramatically reduced from 40% to nearly 10%.
Lastly
,
people
who were born outside Australia and living in the city remained almost at the same level as 15 years ago, but less by 2%.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Demographic
  • Trends
  • Urban areas
  • Rural areas
  • Town
  • Native-born
  • Foreign-born
  • Migration patterns
  • Economic factors
  • Government policies
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Steady
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Time frame
  • Significant changes
  • Distribution
  • Notable
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