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Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while other believe that it is better to straight after school. Discuss both views and give you opinion.

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Some would say that people should study tertiary
education
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 in order to be successful,
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 others are of the opinion that it is better to
work
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 after graduation from school.
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 essay agrees with the first opinion and will show that despite receiving the experience that individuals can get from working, gaining
knowledge
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 in higher
education
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 is essential for a career. Some believe that individuals ought to receive proper
knowledge
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 to succeed in their careers.
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 is because, at university or college, students would be focused on how to do their
work
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 in
a
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the
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 right way and get an
education
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 related to their profession so it would be easy for them to
do
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apply
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great
successes
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success
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 in their
work
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 later and get promotions.
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, many professionals can do their tasks twenty times faster and better
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 their understanding of how to do it properly and they are valuable among their colleagues. In comparison, many students go working straight after school endings to gain experience and get career development. These people can get needed
knowledge
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 in process of doing a job and not waste their time on tertiary
education
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 just because they do not need to have special
education
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 for some jobs and be promoted faster.
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, many call centres do not require higher
education
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 because they believe they can teach their employees by themselves, workers just should have ambition;
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, they can be lost in the path of some difficult tasks in their occupation. In conclusion, individuals can go working after they graduated from school but it can have some consequences
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 as struggling with difficult tasks and not having accurate
knowledge
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 enough for doing their
work
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 correctly.
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