Money should be spent on creating new public buildings such as museums or town hall rather than renovating the existing ones. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In the contemporary world, whether facilities must be spent on building new social edifices than
restore
extant has sparked a heated debate in Wrong verb form
restoring
out
society. Correct your spelling
our
While
many people would argue that town life could be improved only by this
action, I contend that this
method is distrustful.
First of all, there are myriad negative outcomes which are associated with the notion that create
new buildings is much better than Change the verb form
creates
renovate
existing ones, to expound, if authorities build new construction, it will be much Wrong verb form
renovating
expensive
than Correct quantifier usage
more expensive
renovate
Wrong verb form
renovating
old
Add an article
the old
building
. Fix the agreement mistake
buildings
For instance
, in 2017 Astana city hall spent approximately 700 millions
dollars to make new cinema, Change to singular
million
however
, renovating past
cinema Correct article usage
the past
park
had been costed only 70 Fix the agreement mistake
parks
millions
. Change to singular
million
Also
, new buildings cut area
of the town, Correct article usage
the area
it
means that Correct pronoun usage
which
land
where Correct article usage
the land
company
can Correct article usage
the company
made
Change the verb form
make
apartment
Correct article usage
an apartment
house
Fix the agreement mistake
houses
,
was used to make Remove the comma
apply
Add an article
a museum
museum
. So, Fix the agreement mistake
museums
is
the near future cons impacts Correct your spelling
in
such
us
rising house prices and homelessness could not be avoided.
Moving Correct your spelling
as
further
, if local hall destruct
past area buildings, it will Change the verb form
destructs
be
destroy Unnecessary verb
apply
style
of the local town or city. Add an article
the style
For example
, Europe governments never demolish their towns
style. Manu Europe cities Change noun form
town's
towns'
such
as Paris, Madrid, Viena, London were constructed many countries ago and now this
places are Change the determiner
these
golden
Add an article
a golden
treasure
of each country which have own style. As I said before, Fix the agreement mistake
treasures
local
governing Add an article
the local
body
can innovate Fix the agreement mistake
bodies
exist
budlings and made there Wrong verb form
existing
more
better if modern conditions will be added. Change the word
apply
Moreover
if government construct Add a comma
,Moreover
new
building where past edifice will disappear? Removing old edifice cost amount of money, Add an article
a new
thus
, it is not effective to do this
actions
.
Fix the agreement mistake
action
To sum up
, the main reason behind the spent
money to build new contractions does not correlate with the modern economic and social systems. In my opinion, there is no doubt that Replace the word
spending
in
nowadays there Change preposition
apply
are
no better way than Change the verb form
is
recrate
Correct your spelling
recreate
exist
structuresWrong verb form
existing
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