Money should be spent on creating new public buildings such as museums or town hall rather than renovating the existing ones. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In the contemporary world, whether facilities must be spent on building new social edifices than
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extant has sparked a heated debate in
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society.
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many people would argue that town life could be improved only by
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action, I contend that
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method is distrustful. First of all, there are myriad negative outcomes which are associated with the notion that
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new buildings is much better than
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existing ones, to expound, if authorities build new construction, it will be much
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than
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old
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building
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, in 2017 Astana city hall spent approximately 700
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dollars to make new cinema,
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, renovating
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cinema
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had been costed only 70
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, new buildings cut
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of the town,
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means that
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where
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can
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was used to make
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a museum
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museum
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. So,
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the near future cons impacts
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rising house prices and homelessness could not be avoided. Moving
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, if local hall
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past area buildings, it will
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of the local town or city.
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, Europe governments never demolish their
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style. Manu Europe cities
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as Paris, Madrid, Viena, London were constructed many countries ago and now
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places are
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of each country which have own style. As I said before,
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governing
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can innovate
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budlings and made there
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better if modern conditions will be added.
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if government construct
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building where past edifice will disappear? Removing old edifice cost amount of money,
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, it is not effective to do
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actions
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, the main reason behind the
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money to build new contractions does not correlate with the modern economic and social systems. In my opinion, there is no doubt that
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nowadays there
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no better way than
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recreate
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