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More and more people want to own items such as car, clothing and other things, that are made by famous brand. What are the reasons for this? Do you think is it a positive or negative development?

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It is said that some societies are becoming more interested in buying
items
 produced by renowned companies.
While
 in my point of ,view it is an unwelcoming change, In
this
 essay I will illustrate some underlying cases. There are different reasons why
people
 like to buy brandy
items
. First and foremost, some consumers think these companies can make
items
 of higher quality. Nowadays companies by advertisement try to influence buyers, they boasting about the quality and features of their goods.
As a result
,
people
 might buy an item based on the name of the
company
 and the advertisements.
Last
 but not least, some buy
this
Change the determiner
this item
these items
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items
 to show off. Buyers think, if they buy luxurious goods from a renowned
company
, they would show others
such
 as other siblings or friends they are well off and financially strong.
For example
, Alibaba is a travel agent in Iran that copied its name with a Chinese
company
 to use the publicity of the main
company
 and make
people
 rely more on them . It is clear
this
 new trend in society can bring about several detrimental consequences for society.
For example
, It can put more financial strain on families. Consider a Lap top from Apple
company
 with another
company
, in many cases in spite of being exactly the same ,the apple made one is more expensive only because it is produced by Apple and when a person or a family want to buy a laptop has to pay more and put a strain on its budget. In conclusion, the advertisement makes
people
 buy some products from brands and I believe it can be financially detrimental and put pressure on families' budgets.
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