Some countries invest in specialized sports facilities for top athletes but not for the average people. Is this a positive or negative development?

Over the past few decades, there
is
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a significant growth in the
sports
field. It is a common public opinion that, the well-equipped
sports
hub is only for top athletes, not for ordinary
people
in some nations. I vehemently say that it is a negative development.
Therefore
,
following
this
essay will explain my opinion in detail. In the modern era, countries are funding huge amounts for
sports
facilities and renowned
sports
persons. Everyone is paying tax for a single item and has equal rights in the nation. In India,
For instance
, many international stadiums are only allocated for famous sportspeople. No permission was granted to the local
people
.
As a result
, there is no growth for ordinary
people
.
Furthermore
, the Government spends a
high
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amount on
sports
equipment and maintenance of the
sports
centre. At least they could have spent half the amount to construct a special pathway on
road
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for local
people
, those who are doing their daily routines
such
as
,
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running and walking daily for their fitness.
For example
,
i
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I
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decided to start running every morning but that decision
make
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made
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me frustrated because the special running ring was covered by a soft sheet only for special
sports
persons.
On the other hand
, some
people
say that
,
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top athletes
are representing
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represent
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the
country
so they have some additional
privilege
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given
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. The government already paying a huge amount in the form of salaries.
Then
again why additional benefits
.
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They are the ones
which
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who
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get
high
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higher
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remuneration than any other professional. To cite an example, India is a developing
country
, But still, they are paying
high
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higher
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salaries to cricketers than any other developed
country
offers to their sportsperson.
To conclude
,
This
is a negative development for ordinary
people
. because the government is not offering anything to them.
This
will affect the
country
as well as
the
people
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